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  Posted by PoetWithCancer Fri Nov 6, 2009 3:29pm PST

  The most important value of this poem is that it moves me. It makes me feel. I feel with you the sorrow at being put-down by someone you care for so much; someone whose opinion you value so much, that part of you accepts his put-down as the truth, and you feel ugly and lose your self-esteem because you internalize his put-down.

  Technically, this is a very sophisticated poem. For example, you use various types of rhyme--such as absolute rhyme, echo rhryme, Owenian rhyme, and half-rhyme.

  Your use of the expression--

  To prove me with attack

  --shows that you are a well-read person, and that you are also very well-educated, whether formally educated or self-educated--probably both.

  The first third of the heart of poetry is music, rhythm, or esthetic structure. The second third of the heart of poetry is genuine, moving emotion. The final third of the heart of poetry is diction--choosing just the right words--and phrasing them well.

  You have put together the complete heart of poetry in this poem.

  Bye now.

  --PWC

  aka Mr. Poet

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