Wednesday, February 10, 2010

Short story Part (2)

<p>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; I WAS RAISED AN ONLY CHILD BY MY GRANDMA, IN THE THE BACK WOODS OF GOOD OLD MISSISSIPPI. I CAME TO ARIZONA AS AN ADULT. I THINK I WAS MAYBE 28YEARS OLD. WELL THAT WAS 5 YEARS AGO. I CAME HERE BECAUSE I HEARD GOOD THINGS ABOUT THE COST OF LIVING. AND THE JOB OPPRUTUNITIES. BACK IN MISSISSIPPI, BLACK WOMEN, FIND IT VERY HARD TO GET A GOOD PAYING JOB.SO THATS WHY I BEGAN MY NEW LIFE HERE.WELL ANYWAYS.......<br><br>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; THIS MAN JUST LYING IN FRONT OF MY EYES MAYBE DYING AND I DIDN&#39;T KNOW WHAT TO DO. I THOUGHT TO MYSELF, &quot; I should call for help.&quot; AT THAT TIME A OVERWHELMING FEELING CAME OVER ME TO SHAKE THIS MAN UNTIL I GET A REASPONSE <strong>.</strong> SO BENT DOWN WITHOUT OUT EVEN THINKING TWICE, AND ROLLED HIM ON TO HIS BACK. HIS FACE WAS HANDSOME, BUT VERY DIRTY. ON HIS LEFT CHEEK WAS A BURN SHAPED ODDLY LIKE A MISSHAPENED STAR. VERY WEIRD INDEED. HE LOOKED ODDLY PEACEFULL. MOUTH SLIGHTLY OPENED, EYES CLOSED TIGHT.STILL BREATHING AT A STEADY PACE. HE DIDN&#39;T LOOK FAMILAR TO ME AT ALL. THE STRANGE MANS COLD, PALE SKIN SEEMED TO GLISTEN&nbsp;COVERED WITH DROPS OF WATER.&nbsp;HIS VERY DARK CURLY HAIR WAS SOAKED AND STUCK TO HIS FACE AND EARS. I KNEELED BESIDE HIM AND TAPPED HIS RIGHT CHEEK KINDA HARD, AND SAID, &quot;<strong>WAKE UP</strong>!&#39;&#39; AS LOUD AS I COULD.HE OPEN HIS EYES JUST AS FAST AS I SAID WAKE UP.IT STARTELED ME SO I FELL ON MY BUTT RIGHT IN THE COLD DIRTY WATER.AS HE STUDIED MY FACE, AND I STUDIED HIS EYES ,FOR A BRIEF SECOND HE SEEMED CALM.<br>&nbsp;<br>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; HIS EYES WHERE BLACK SHINY STONES WITH NO PUPILS AND HIS BREATH WAS HOT AND SMELLED OF SULFUR. HIS EYE GREW BIG, AND HIS BODY BEGAN TO TREMBIL. THEN OUT OF NO WHERE HE LET OUT A BLOOD CURDLING, HIGH PITCH SCREAM. HE GRABBED MY ARMS SO TIGHLY AS IF I WAS TRYING TO HURT HIM. I YELLED ,&quot;Your hurting me!&quot; AND HE LET GO QUICKLY. I GUESS AFTER HE REALIZED I MEANT HIM NO HARM,HE PUSHED ME BACK, AND I FELL BACK HARD TO THE WET PAVEMENT. HE JUMP UP LIKE SOMETHING BIT HIM. AND TOOK OFF DOWN THE STREET FAST AS LIGHTNING. AND ALL THIS TIME, IT DIDN&#39;T DAWN ON ME THAT NO ONE ELSE WAS AROUND. JUST ME AND THAT STRANGE MAN..........</p> <p>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; I FELT VERY STRANGE ABOUT MY ENCOUNTER. SO I TOOK A MOMENT TO REFLECT RIGHT THERE ON THE SIDEWALK. MY FIRST THOUGHT WAS TO CALL MY SISTER MYA TO SEE IF SHE WAS OKAY. SHE LIVED LIKE 15MINUTES FROM ME BY CAR. I BRISKLY JOGGED BACK TO MY HOUSE AND AS I REACHED THE FRONT DOOR I FELT A CHILL GO UP MY SPINE. I STOPPED ON THE PORCH AND EVERYTHING WENT BLACK.....I FELT MYSELF FALLING IN THE DARKEST BLACK TUNNEL IMAGINAL TO MAN KIND. I NEVER HIT BOTTOM. I SEEN A YELLOW BALL OF FIRE COMING AT ME SLOWLY. IT LIT UP MY FACE. IT GREW BIGGGER AND BRIGHTER AS IT GOT CLOSER TO ME. MY FACE BEGAN TO BURN INTENSLY....MY STOMACH BEGAN TO TURN...MY BODY WAS ON FIRE. I FELT AS IF SOMEONE THREW ME IN AN OVEN FULL OF HOT COALS. I KNEW THIS HAD TO BE SOME KIND OF BIZZARE DREAM BECAUSE IT WAS SO IRRATIONAL. I SEEN THOUSANDS AND MILLIIONS OF EYES BLINKING AND SWIRLING AROUND IN THE DARKNESS. MOONS AND PLANETS SEEM TO BE FALLING WITH ME. I FINALLY HIT THE BOTTOM AND MY BODY TURNED TO ICE AND BROKE INTO A THOUSAND SHAREDS OF ICE.......... (DEEP BREATH) HHAAAAAA!!!</p> <p>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; MY HEAD ACHED, AND MY FACE FELT TIGHT AND HOT. I LAID THERE ON MY BACK FEELING LIKE I JUST GOT HIT BY A TRAIN OR SOMETHING.IT TOOK ME A MINUTE TO GET UP OFF OF THE COLD WET GROUND. AS I AROSE I NOTICED THAT IT WAS STILL VERY QUIET OUTSIDE, AND THE SKY WAS&nbsp; AS PINK AS A SUMMERS SUNSET. IT FELT ERRIE, AND I WAS VERY COMFUSED.I DIDN&#39;T KNOW HOW LONG I WAS OUT BUT IT FELT LIKE HOURS. I STUMBLED TO MY FEET AND MADE MY WAY IN THE HOUSE. I NEEDED TO CALL MY SISTER TO SEE IF SHE WAS OKAY. I SCRAMBLED TO MY CELLPHONE AND BEGAN TO DIAL HER NUMBER FRANTICLLY. IT DIDN&#39;T EVEN RING. SO I HUNG UP AND TRYED AGAIN. NOTHING. THERE WASN&#39;T EVEN A DIAL TONE. SO I JUST STARED AT THE PHONE IN DISBELIEF. SOMETHING CRAZY WAS GOING ON AND I NEED TO FIND OUT WHAT. THROWING THE PHONE IN MY POCKET, I RAN TO MY ROOM TO FIND MY SHOES AND MY CAR KEYS. THE SHOES WHERE ON THE FLOOR NEXT TO DRESSER, AND MY KEYS WHERE ON THE NIGHTSTAND. I SNATCHED THEM UP, QUICKLY PUT ON MY SHOES AND RAN OUT THE ROOM DOOR, NOT FORGETTING MY NEW WHITE SWEATER JACKET THAT WAS IN THE HALL CLOSET I WENT OUTSIDE AND LOCKED THE DOOR BEHIND MYSELF.&nbsp;<br><br>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; &nbsp;I JUMPED IN MY CAR AND IT WOULDNT START. I KNEW I JUST GOT IT FIXED LAST WEEK, SO THERE SHOULDN&#39;T BE A REASON WHY IT WOULDN&#39;T START UP. I WAS GETTING VERY WORRIED AND SCARED AT THAT POINT. I LOOKED IN MY REAR VIEW MIRROR AS I ALWAYS DO TO STUDY WHAT IT ON THE STREET BEHIND ME.NO ONE WAS THERE JUST LIKE I EXPECTED.ONLY PARKED CARS AND A STREET COVERED IN WATER. SITTING THERE PONDERING THE DERANGED EVENTS OF THE DAY , MY EYES BEGAN TO SWELL WITH TEARS, AND I NOTICE AGAIN HOW HOT AND TIGHT MY FACE FELT.I WANTED TO SEE WHAT WAS GOING ON WITH MY FACE SO I TURNED THE REAR VIEW MIRROR TOWARDS MYSELF. IMMEDIATELY I GASPED AND JUMPED BACK IN HORROR. MY EYES AND HAIR WHERE WHITE AS SNOW, AS IF SOMEONE HAD STOLEN MY IRISES AND ALL THEY LEFT BEHIND WHERE MY PUPILS!! MY CHEEK WAS SLIGHTLY BURNT. AND IT SUDDENLY REMINDED ME OF THE MAN LYING IN THE STREET EARLIER.</p>
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    Posted by Michael L. Wilson Tue Sep 9, 2008 11:52am PDT

    Your story is decent. Kind of jumbled. You should proof read and edit a little more. Make paragraphs. Highlight emphasis. Use plenty of adjectives, they add more of a robust flavor and enhance the dullness of the color. These things will make your story more presentable and more enjoyable to read. I'm patiently waiting the next chapter.

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